Painful Rhymes

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  1. drmilktruck

    drmilktruck I Bleed Orange

    May 17, 2009
    Plymouth, MN
    I was listening to Raspberry Beret the other day and I always cringe at these lines -

    I was working part time in a five-and-dime
    My boss was Mr. McGee
    He told me several times that he didn't like my kind
    'Cause I was a bit too leisurely


    The forced rhymes - dime/kind and McGee/leisurely. (Plus I don't believe for a minute Prince had a boss named Mr. McGee.) Prince can write great lyrics but he's not immune from these kind of painful rhymes.

    E.g. Manic Monday -

    It's just another manic Monday
    I wish it was Sunday
    'Cause that's my fun day
    My I don't have to run day
    It's just another manic Monday

    There's a page about this on TV Tropes: https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/PainfulRhyme

    What painful rhyme schemes can you share?
     
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  2. latetotheparty

    latetotheparty Gretschie

    105
    Mar 18, 2018
    Omaha
    the entirety of Steve Miller’s Take the Money and Run

    El Paso... Hassle.. Castle

    Bobby Sue ... do ... Tube ... Loose

    Texas .. Taxes ... Facts is ... Justice

    <CRINGE!>
    Painful to listen to





    https://g.co/kgs/TRjV1w
     
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  3. Sabato

    Sabato Country Gent

    Mar 22, 2019
    Massachusetts
    I was thinking yesterday about schools being out which lead me to think of Alice Cooper's "Schools Out for Summer" in which, one of the funniest lyrics: "We can't even think of a word that rhymes!" Love it.
     
  4. swivel

    swivel Country Gent

    May 13, 2018
    PNW
    Not too painful to do, but I have trouble fitting the words in while playing on a couple of my originals:(registered)
    Fortunately I have singer to do it now!
    "I don't think that I can make romance...
    In this emotional avalanche..."

    or this one also:

    "Receivin the leavin, Or causin the grievin -
    The song is still the same, There aint no one to blame.. "
     
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  5. wabash slim

    wabash slim Gretschified

    Age:
    70
    Feb 10, 2010
    lafayette in
    Just another reason that I don't pay attention to lyrics.

    I've heard that Mick Jagger came up with "vowel sounds" first, then came up with words that fit.
     
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  6. dougmon

    dougmon Gretschie

    372
    Jan 9, 2013
    California
    Van Morrison is somewhat the same. I don't know if he comes up with vowel sounds first, but it seems that the sound of the words is almost more important than the words in a number of his songs.
     
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  7. Sabato

    Sabato Country Gent

    Mar 22, 2019
    Massachusetts
    Yesterday
    Paul’s original lyrics were, “Scrambled eggs, Oh you’ve got such lovely legs, Scrambled eggs. Oh, my baby, how I love your legs.”
    Paul said: Strumming away on a medieval guitar, I thought [sings] ‘Scrambled Egg.’ But I never could finish it, and eventually I took it back in. With the ancient wisdom of the east, John came out with [sings] ‘Yesterday’.”
     
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  8. Sabato

    Sabato Country Gent

    Mar 22, 2019
    Massachusetts
    Not painful, but I always loved the alliteration of Warren Zebon in:
    Little Old Lady Got Mutilated Late Last Night.
     
  9. Byron

    Byron Synchromatic

    766
    Sep 4, 2009
    uk
    There is nothing you could hope to gain
    By doing this
    To be here in your arms is like...
    Falling off of a precipice

    Always loved this song and marveled at the rhyme
     
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  10. loudnlousy

    loudnlousy Friend of Fred

    Age:
    54
    Oct 18, 2015
    Germany
    I got a vinyl record from the late seventies released by a local German band called Black Dragon. (The name is so much clichè in itself....)
    Every rhyme is good but it is neither english nor another exsisting language. Something what we used to call "blendax" over here.
    Even the Scorpions used to release records in "very stange tongues" that sound nice but are meaningless "tone paintings" early in their carreer.
    I always found that to be embarrassing.
    Producing a record in those days was a very, very expensive business. I do not have any idea why no German band did not feel responsible to check their english lyrics by native speakers. Crazy.
     
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  11. ramjac

    ramjac Synchromatic

    713
    Aug 14, 2011
    Wisconsin
    Sometimes the rhyme works, but the lyrics get mangled in a misguided attempt to force it. See, e.g., Tough Guys by REO Speedwagon off of High Infidelity.

    “Brains all where they sit”? Really?
     
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  12. Hammerhands

    Hammerhands Country Gent

    Aug 26, 2011
    Winnipeg
    Near rhymes are fine by me. I have songs that don't rhyme at all.

    People tend to dislike Ozzy's black masses line. It no longer bothers me.
     
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  13. blueruins

    blueruins Country Gent

    May 28, 2013
    Savannah, GA
    How about when Andy Partridge of XTC rhymes “cycle” with “umbilical”?
    Todd Rundgren nearly pulled his hair out.
     
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  14. Sabato

    Sabato Country Gent

    Mar 22, 2019
    Massachusetts
    People speculated about whatever they may have said, even got temporarily jailed
     
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  15. new6659

    new6659 Country Gent

    Loretta Lynn - "The work we done was hard, at night we'd sleep cause we were tared" (i.e. tired).
     
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  16. Henry

    Henry I Bleed Orange

    Apr 9, 2014
    Petaluma
    Bird, word.;)
     
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  17. wildeman

    wildeman Gretschified

    May 10, 2015
    norcal
    Genius!
     
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  18. audept

    audept Senior Gretsch-Talker

    Age:
    72
    Dec 1, 2010
    Sydney, Australia
    This is why I prefer instrumentals........:eek:
     
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  19. Sabato

    Sabato Country Gent

    Mar 22, 2019
    Massachusetts
    Michael Palin in Python, goes to the lava-tree, great pun, ryhmes lavatory with tea...
    He's a lumberjack and he's OK
    He sleeps all night and he works all day
    I cut down trees, I eat my lunch
    I go to the lavatory
    On Wednesdays I go shopping and have buttered scones for tea
     
  20. Cassotto

    Cassotto Gretschie

    Age:
    45
    365
    Jun 16, 2019
    Spain
    English is not my native language, and though my written English is more or less OK, my spoken English is lousy, so I'm not even sure Leo Sayer is trying to make "everything" rhyme with "friends" in "Moonlighting", but I think so. Maybe that's standard pronunciation somewhere, but it gives me the creeps.
     
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